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I was a little early but I was so excited, I could not wait any longer. I dressed in warm clothes and headed off to the bus shelter. Uncle Wayne should be here soon. I could hear the rumbling of the kenworth coming down the road. It pulled up, I was really pleased. I seemed to be waiting for ages. As I went to hopped in the truck I said. “Hi.” I looked up and and saw Tyler. My cousin. I thought this was going to be a good day but now I knew it was going to be amazing. Then I noticed Tyler had a gun he had slid it down the side of the seat and I knew we were going hunting.

We finally arrived at Crane Creek, Wayne jumped out of the truck and started work he hopped onto the digger. He pulled the window up and turned the key, it started with a roar. Then he  turned the hydraulic pumps on so he could move the boom. He lifted some schists up and dropped it on the front trailer behind the truck making a loud crashing sound. Tyler and I had to pull the parking brake off so the truck could start rolling forward and now he was able to load the back trailer. Then we pulled the parking brake back on. We had some time so Tyler and I went for a quick walk in the bush while Uncle Wayne loaded the back trailer.

When we got back Uncle Wayne had finished and it was time to go.

Tyler and I ran down to the gate so we could shut it after Wayne drove out we made it in time to see Uncle Wayne. We jumped into the truck and set off down the road until we got back to the yard. When we arrived at the yard we unloaded the first trailer, jackknifed and unloaded the back trailer.

This was the most perfect ever even though hunting did not come to anything. Maybe next time.

The end.

 

Boat Ride

The Perfect Day

I am learning to make my writing more interesting for the reader. I know I will be able to do this when I add more detail, interesting words and include what I see, hear, smell and feel.

I was a little early but I was so excited, I could not wait any longer. I dressed in warm clothes and headed off to the bus shelter. Uncle Wayne should be here soon. I could hear the rumbling of the kenworth coming down the road. It pulled up, as I went to hopped in the truck I said. “Hi.” I looked up and and saw Tyler. My cousin. I thought this was going to be a good day but now I knew it was going to be amazing. Then I noticed Tyler had a gun he had slid it down the side of the seat and I knew we were going hunting.

 We finally arrived at Crane Creek, Wayne jumped out of the truck and onto the digger. He pulled the window up and turned the key, it started with a roar. He turned the hydraulic pumps on so he could move the boom. He lifted some schists up and dropped it on the front trailer behind the truck. Tyler and I had to pull the parking brake off so the truck could start rolling forward. Now he was able to load the back trailer. Then we pulled the parking brake back on. Tyler and I went for a walk in the bush while Uncle Wayne loaded the back trailer. When we got back it was time to go.


 Tyler and I ran down to the gate so we could shut it after Wayne drove out. We jumped into the truck and set off down the road until we got back to the yard. When we arrived at the yard we unloaded the first trailer and we jackknifed and unloaded the back trailer.


 This was the most perfect ever even though hunting did not come to anything. Maybe next time.

Dice in the Corner

To solve this problem I added the numbers of the dice together. This problem was easy to work on because I had worked on something similar and I have a good understanding of my basic facts.

I found 37 different ways to solve this problem.